The I loved you first. Cool statement going with a pretty cool pic otherwise I have no idea what's going on and there isn't enough to build a story that I like in my head. I think it would make more "sense" if he was holding a gun behind his back. Maybe find a picture with that? I just need a couple implicit clues to figure something out that is going on.
If your gonna go literal go literal. Like maybe a chair made out of arms rather than an "armchair". The flowers are nice but I fail to see or get a hint of revolution or YOU or we were. The statement,
You and me,
we were each other's armchair revolutionaries. Implies 2 people, the passage of time, and being those armchair revolutionaries. The statement so far other than an armchair and there only being one (implying that the you and me are no longer you and me but You, or me) isn't being fulfilled. I'm not saying put in two people and use a background of AK-47s but somethings got to pull the text and the visuals more together. A suggestion might be to have a person doing like a squat very stiff and have the other persons sitting on them like a chair. 4/10
The we did nothing and we did everything is a cliche. Everyone expects the dualism. Other wise I like the empty chair with the we did nothing. 5/10 (with cliche)
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The I loved you first. Cool statement going with a pretty cool pic otherwise I have no idea what's going on and there isn't enough to build a story that I like in my head. I think it would make more "sense" if he was holding a gun behind his back. Maybe find a picture with that? I just need a couple implicit clues to figure something out that is going on.
Armchair.
If your gonna go literal go literal. Like maybe a chair made out of arms rather than an "armchair". The flowers are nice but I fail to see or get a hint of revolution or YOU or we were.
The statement,
You and me,
we were each other's armchair revolutionaries. Implies 2 people, the passage of time, and being those armchair revolutionaries. The statement so far other than an armchair and there only being one (implying that the you and me are no longer you and me but You, or me) isn't being fulfilled. I'm not saying put in two people and use a background of AK-47s but somethings got to pull the text and the visuals more together. A suggestion might be to have a person doing like a squat very stiff and have the other persons sitting on them like a chair. 4/10
The we did nothing and we did everything is a cliche. Everyone expects the dualism. Other wise I like the empty chair with the we did nothing. 5/10 (with cliche)
interesting visual elements.
still find the least interesting thing is your typography.
suggest you work more on it.
explore faces and their possibilities.
use typography as a design element, not just a label.
you're beginning to do this in a few of these, then return to labeling in the following pieces.
still, all nice and interesting.
don't throw anything out!
love.
g.
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